First Edit audience feedback continued

During todays session, I had my first edit watched and assessed by two members of the class.


The improvements suggested really support other feedback I have had on this, such as the argument between the parents. However, there are some new pieces of feedback which I have not thought about until now.

• establishing shot of the house before the argument in the flashback. 
• sound effects, ambience, before the music starts so it doesn't slip into a 'music video' convention.
• the colour of the titles, appearing during the flashback, sometimes blend in with the background and are hard to see. 

Other than these improvements, my opening sequence was well received and even aspects of it which I was not so fond of, were positively commented on. Such as the dialogue with the voice overs and argument.